Mandalorian War Poem

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Mandalorian War Poem

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This poem I made is based upon the Mandalorian Wars. In case you don't know you can read it here:
http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Mandalorian_Wars

I wrote it in haste and not in grammatical sense :p It's very dark and cruel so...

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Heroes to Mandalore
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Heroes of Mandalore, heroes to all!
Come to Mandalore, the Republic shall fall
With its corruption, with its history
With its oppression, with its misery
Come to our Flashpoint, come slaughter them all
Kill all the Jedi, come slaughter them raw
Kill all the people, come butcher their law
Let the Republic fall

Heroes of Mandalore, heroes to all!
Come to our leader, come to our cause
Let them burn to the ground, let them know of our cause
Let them die in the heat, let them know of our jaws
Come to Serroco, come watch them burn
We are short of time; we must teach them to learn
We are the righteous, the throne that we yearn
Let the Republic fall

Heroes of Mandalore, heroes to all!
Come to our aid, come to our brow
Do not forestall, the time is now
Do not even cease, the hour is close
Come to your service, the Jedi await us
Onwards to Duro, from there we take flight
Onwards to Coruscant, from there we stifle light
Let the Republic fall

Heroes of Mandalore, heroes to all!
Come to your stallion, break the Jedi's hope
Never falter in battle, but look at the grand scope
Never be fearful in battle, but take all that you see
Come to our last stand, let it last for all time
Defy their hopes, both the Jedi and the Soldiers
Defy their counter, both the Republic and their holders
Let the Republic fall


Heroes of Mandalore, heroes to all!
Come to your senses, come seek the fight
Fight their offense, in all its disrespect
Fight them on Malachor, in its grand prospect
Come to our last battle, come prove your birthright
In our last hour, show your command
In our last fight, prove our last stand
Let the Republic tremble

Heroes of Mandalore, heroes to all!
Come to the fallen, but never give up
This is the honor, the one that we seek most
This is the pride, the one that we shall host
Come to our destiny, receive it's ending
Never forget this, never admit defeat
Never forget us, never stop our beat
Let the Republic remember

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Tell me what you think. It's a bit dark though <,<
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I'm not qualified to critique poetry, but I can definitely appreciate the aesthetics of your poem.
Great job! ;D
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nice poem :D lots of times when people try to rhyme poems they focus too much on the end rhyme and the poem loses its meaning or depth, but yours doesnt at all and its awesome o: I like the transition to the end and change of events in the poem xd
(i love writing, reading and editing poetry)
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Wow, this is awesome Mandalor.
You should enter this in some sort of (Star Wars) poetry competition. In fact go edit the Mandalorian Wikipedia (Wookiepedia) page and add this in there.
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A§H»BierLKW wrote:Wow, this is awesome Mandalor.
You should enter this in some sort of (Star Wars) poetry competition. In fact go edit the Mandalorian Wikipedia (Wookiepedia) page and add this in there.
+1 Great ideas
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I like dark.....nice work
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too long to read, looks good though ;p
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A§H»GrnMoon wrote:too long to read, looks good though ;p
Thanks for being honest o.o

I can't put this on Wookipidia since technically this is fan fiction and isn't part of the real deal :p I don't know if there are any sorts of Star Wars poem contests out there though. Here's a cool vid on the wars :p

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